This weekend the parameters of the Trifecta Writing Challenge are as follows:
"Write a horror story in 33 words, without the words blood, scream, died, death, knife, gun, or kill. Good luck."
I've written a piece that is a bit out of the box. I think of it as subtle, I guess. Understated, or a trifle ambiguous. No chainsaws, hacksaws or gore, and of course, no blood or screaming. Yet, [and maybe worse] the kind of horror that can grin, from across the room…
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After their fight, she watched him sipping beer while the television blared on.
If you only knew what I put in that!
But he was smiling, as she reached for yet another chocolate.
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This weekend's challenge is decided by the Editors -- in other words, there is no voting to do. Click on the image of the Trifectasaurus Rex, above -- and visit.
Read the excellent submissions there, and [better yet] submit one of your own!
-- Cheers!
This has to win, or at least be in the top three. This has got to be my absolute favorite out of all the submissions that I have read so far. I love this story! Brilliant!
ReplyDeletePS: This reminded me of a similar story that I wrote a while back for a different writing challenge:
http://scriptorwrites.wordpress.com/2012/02/10/it-wasnt-my-fault/
ooooooohhhhh
ReplyDeletenot the chocolat. :)e!!!
wonder what the CSI techs will think of the crime scene
Scriptorobscura -- These are very kind words from you, and I consider them high praise from a great writer.
ReplyDeleteYour last week's submission [the haraam one] was amazing -- HOWEVER -- your website does not allow me to comment on it. I have to be signed in by Wordpress, Facebook, or Twitter and I am not on any of these networks, hence you could not see my pre-reciprocal admiration for your own words. Alas.
Barbara -- yep. Poisoned beer AND chocolate! Who's smiling in the sequel?
NO-ONE!
Well done! There’s definitely horror in those 33 words.
ReplyDeleteBest of luck!
Uh-oh. I'll have to add "don't let hubby get me a drink after a fight" to the list of things to keep in mind :)
ReplyDeleteThanks so much for linking up with Trifecta this week. Hope to see you back on Monday (10 am Eastern) for the new prompt and some exciting news about the changes Trifecta is making to spread the word about our writing community.
ReplyDeleteDoesn't the guy know that chocolate is sacred?!? He should drink that entire beer down and then some.
ReplyDeleteVery creepy. Loved it!
C.